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The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countriesSummarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countriesSummarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
given
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bar chart illustrates the comparison of student activity during the weekday in three different countries, which are
UK
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the UK
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,
Japan
 and
Germany
. The units are
in
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on
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 average and the activities
divided
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are divided
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 into sleeping, studying and relaxing.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that studying is the most popular
activities
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activity
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 in
Japan
 and has the biggest figure compared with others.
Meanwhile
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Meanwhile,
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 in
Germany
 and
UK
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the UK
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, all of the activities have a
slight
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slightly
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 different average number. As the chart shows, in
Japan
 and
Germany
, studying has the highest average at 13 and 9, respectively, compared with sleeping and relaxing. Sleeping
placed
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place
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 in the second position in both countries,
make up
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makeup
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 7 in
Japan
 and 8 in
Germany
.
Lastly
, relaxing has the lowest number in
Japan
 at 4,
while
Germany
 at 7. Meanwhile in
UK
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the UK
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, sleeping is the most favorite activity
accounted
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accounting
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 for 8.5 and
this
 figure is the highest among other countries.
Activity
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The activity
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 of studying in
UK
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the UK
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,
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apply
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 has the lowest figure at 8.
Finally
, relaxing has the same rate as
Germany
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in Germany
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, japan, germany with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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