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The graphs below show the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017

The graphs below show the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017
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The line graph provided illustrates how many
visitors
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 went to
an
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a
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 specific
island
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 over an eight-year period from 2010 to 2017, and
also
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 compares the
number
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 of holidaymakers who have stayed on cruise
ships
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 with those who stayed on
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island
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the island
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 at the corresponding time.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the total
number
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 of
tourists
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 followed an upward trend,
likewise
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 the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
ships
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 and
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island
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islands
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.
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 there used to be more settlers on
ships
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 until 2015,
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 of the period
number
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 of
tourists
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 staying on
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island
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the island
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 overtook their place. Total
number
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 of holidaymakers seeing
this
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island
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 was 1
million
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 individuals in 2010.
This
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number
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 doubled in 2013 following some gradual increases, prior to reaching a
platuea
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plateau
 from 2015 to 2016 with approximately 2.7
million
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tourists
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. In the final year
number
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 of
tourists
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 soared and reached a peak of 3.5
million
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visitors
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 in 2017. From 2010 to 2013, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
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the ship
a ship
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ship
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ships
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was fluctuating
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fluctuated
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, unlike those
of
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apply
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staying on
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island
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the island
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 reaching a high of 1.5
million
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tourists
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. Since
then
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 the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on cruise
ships
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 witnessed slight rises which has led to
reach
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a reach
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to
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of
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 2
millions
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million
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,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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 the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
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island
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the island
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 did not change, except a mere decrease in 2016.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, island, number, ships, tourists, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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