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The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014.

The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014.
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The table illustrates how the catches and imports of fish vary from 2004 to 2014
into
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 Perth, Australia. In 2010 companies barely import any products.
This
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 phenomenon
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 later, fluctuating in the following years and
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 reaching around 400 in 2016. After 2017
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, it drops to below 200. Individual activities are
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 rather insignificant, especially from 2010 to 2015. In 2016
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, numbers
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 around 400, but it ultimately levels off to less than 200 in 2020, just like companies. Even though vessels stand at around 100, there is a dramatic increase in 2011, followed by a drastic decrease. Over the years the results reached by vessels fluctuate. All in all,

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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