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The chart shows the average daily minimum and maximum levels of air pollutants in 4 cities 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart shows the average daily minimum and maximum levels of air pollutants in 4 cities 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart illustrates the comparison of pollutant
level
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levels
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 that contaminate four different countries namely
Los
Angeles
, Calcutta, Beijing and
Mexico
City
 on daily averages. In general,
Mexico
City
 experiences the highest
level
 of pollutants of N20 and SO2 on a day, Beijing has the lowest
level
 of
Min
 N20,
while
Los
Angeles
 has the lowest
level
 of pollutants of So2. To commend with the
level
 of N20.
Mexico
City
 witnessed on
level
 207
max
 N20
while
level
 of minimum N20 in
level
 113.
Furthermore
,
Los
Angeles
 is the second
city
 which has 104
levels
 of
Max
 N20 and 39
levels
 of
Min
 N20. Beijing and Calcutta experience the same condition in terms of
Max
 N20, in over 50
levels
,
while
 their
min
level
 of N20 saw a different
level
, the previous one in 14
levels
 and the latter in 30
levels
. in terms of SO2,
Mexico
city
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City
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 is seen at 200 at the
max
level
,
while
 hitting 80 at the
min
level
. Beijing has half of
Mexico
City
 in the
max
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maximum
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level
 of SO2 and has 25
levels
 in the minimum. Calcutta's
level
 of Maximum and minimum of SO2 are quite the same, only has 12 different points,
while
Los
Angeles
 has the lowest
level
 on both,
Max
 hit 10 and
min
 in 2
levels
.
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