Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, many people think that peers should start studying a foreign
language
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at
primary
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level because it can make them more capable
to pick
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things in any society if
students
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start studying
the
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apply

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foreign
languages
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in
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at

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higher
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the higher

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or secondary level,
this
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will make the
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student
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students

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uncomfortable. In
this
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essay, we will study
about
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the benefits and harms of learning foreign
languages
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. From one point of view, if a
student
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have
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has

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syarted
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started

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learning any foreign
lanuguage
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language

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in
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at

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the
begining
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of his
education
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,
this
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will help
alot
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a lot

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that particular
student
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in his daily life
as well as
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in the future or if the
student
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plan to study abroad,
then
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foreign
languages
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would help him
alot
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a lot

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in his
education
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and
also
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in the job. Recently, the
Goverment
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government

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of
Pakistan
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have made
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the english
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the english

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english
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language
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compulsory in every school
bnecause
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because

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it
have
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has

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been observed, that
this
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trend is increasing day by day, the young public today after completing their intermediate or
bachelor
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bachelor's

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from
Pakistan
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try to continue their
education
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in any foreign country. So, it will prove a good rule to teach any of the foreign
lanuguage
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language

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from the
begining
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beginning

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so that youth would not have to face
difficultuies
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difficulties

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in the future.
On the other hand
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, making the foreign
language
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complusory
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compulsory

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in our
education
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from the
begining
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beginning

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would
also
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have
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a ha
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a ha

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ha
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a
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side effect on the youth because,
such
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students
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who
wants
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want

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to stay in
Pakistan
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throughout their life and
also
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wants
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want

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to continue with
job
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the job

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in their own country, those
students
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would not be able to focus on one
language
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such
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as the national
language
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of
Pakistan
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is
urdu
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Urdu

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and
punjabi
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Punjabi

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. So if our schools, colleges, and universities teachers teach
students
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two to three
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language
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languages

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including foreign
languages
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this
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would have a
negitive
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negative

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effect on the
student
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and
such
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students
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would not be able to focus and their minds would be confused. In conclusion,
although
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those
students
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studying
foreign
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a foreign

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language
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from the
begining
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beginning

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would face minimum
dificulties
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difficulties

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in moving to different countries
but
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those
students
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who do not have planned to move abroad face difficulties because of studying
foreign
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a foreign

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language
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. In my opinion, teachers should focus on
students
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according to
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their goals or needs.

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task achievement
Your essay partially addresses the question, but the response needs to be more developed with clearer argumentation. Focus on fully answering the question by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages in a balanced way, and then clearly stating if the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
coherence cohesion
Organise your ideas more logically, using paragraphs effectively to separate them. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea and the ideas within the paragraph should link together smoothly.
supported main points
Use topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to clearly state the main point of that paragraph, and then support that point with specific examples or explanations.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction and conclusion are present but could be improved to more effectively introduce the topic and summarise your viewpoint. The conclusion particularly should clearly state if you believe the advantages do or do not outweigh the disadvantages.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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