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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
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The given graph illustrates how the percentage of families owning electrical
appliances
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 changed and the
time
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 a household spent on housework every
week
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 in a single country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
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, ownership of all three
appliances
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 increased during the years 1920 to 2019 whilst the
time
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 a family spent on housework every
week
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 declined. In 1920, the refrigerator owned the lowest proportion compared to
other
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the other
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 two
appliances
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, with almost 0%,
while
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 the percentage of washing machines and vacuum cleaners were 40% and 30%, respectively. They all kept growing until 1960,
a
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when a
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decrease appeared in the proportion of washing machines. During
this
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time
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, the number of households owning refrigerators surged and surpassed the other two
appliances
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. The proportion of refrigerators and vacuum cleaners both reached 100% between 1980 and 2000.
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, after the drop in 1960, ownership of washing machines started to rise in 1980 and grew steadily.
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, the
time
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 a family spent doing housework started at 50 hours a
week
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 in 1920, significantly fell to 15 hours in 1980, remained stable between till 2000, and slightly dropped to nearly 10 hours a
week
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words appliances, time, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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