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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbear island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbear island between 2010 and 2017.
#tourists #caribbear #island
The given line chart provides information on the proportion of
travelers
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travellers
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 who hit
caribbear
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Caribbean
island
 in the 7-year
period
 from 2010-2011. Units are measured in
millions
.
Overall
, the total inflow of tourists grew over the given
period
.
Similarly
, the
numbers
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number
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 of visitors who
peferred
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preferred
 to stay on
cruise
 ships and on
island
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islands
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also
 increased. In 2010,
total
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a total
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 of
1million
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1 million
 tourists
recorded
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were recorded
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 on
caribbear
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Caribbean
island
, from which around 0.6
millions
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million
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 stayed on
cruise
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a cruise
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ship
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ships
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,
wheresa
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whereas
where
 0.4million on
island
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the island
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. Afterwards, the population of immigrants in total rose over the given
periods
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period
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, reaching
3.5millions
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3.5 million
 in 2017, which was the highest of all time.
Initially
, Staying on
cruise
 ships was people´s first choice over the
island
. There was continuous growth in the percentage of people spending their holidays on
cruise
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a cruise
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, hereby ending the
period
 with 1.5
millions
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million
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.
Coversely
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Conversely
, In
case
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the case
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 of
Island
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the Island
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, there
was
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were
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 seen some fluctuations till 2012,
however
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however,
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 there was
gradual
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a gradual
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increament
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increase
 till the end of the
period
. It
touches
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touched
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 its peak, at 2
millions
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million
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, in 2017, overtaking the figure
of
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for
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cruise
 ships.
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