The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Describe the information shown below in your own words. What implications do the indicators have for the countries? You should write at least 150 words.

The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Describe the information shown below in your own words. What implications do the indicators have for the countries? You should write at least 150 words.
The given figure shows the 4 different aspects of social and economic for 4 nations in 1994 based on statistics
of
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United
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the United
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Nation
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.
Overall
, it can be seen clearly that
Canada
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Canadian
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and
Japan
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Japanese
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citizens
had better
standar
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standards
of living and
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rather than the
citizens
of
Peru
and
Zaire
. As the table
showed
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, the yearly revenue of the
citizens
of
Japan
and
Canada
were
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was
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much higher than the other country with 15670 and 11100 USD per
person
respectively,
while
the
citizens
Peru
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of Peru
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and
Zaire
were
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only had 260 and 130 USD per
person
respectively.
Further
that
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,
Japan
and
Canada
had 78% and 76% consecutively in life expectancy at birth
where
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whereas
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it was only 68% and 34% in
Peru
and
Zaire
consecutively
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. As it showed
from
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the table
also
, the percentage of adult literacy rate in
Japan
and
Canada
share the same which is at 99% meanwhile in
Peru
was at 68% and
Zaire
was half of
Peru
. In
additional
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,
Japan
and
Canada
had plenty supply of daily calories per
person
which around 3000 calories
while
Peru
and
Zaire
had less than 2000 daily calories per
person
.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, japan, citizens, peru, zaire, person with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • indicators
  • population
  • GDP per capita
  • life expectancy
  • literacy rate
  • infant mortality rate
  • prosperous
  • less developed
  • level of education
  • healthcare
  • improvements
  • services
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