the map shows developments, which took place in the bookstore between 2000 and now.
The map illustrates the changes in a bookstore that took place in the same exact location between 2000 and now.
Overall
, there are several new areas and book sections added in the new version of a bookstore as can be seen from the picture.
In the initial year, there was only a service desk and several book sections that were separated based on their topics, such
as fiction
, non-fiction
, travel, cuisine and a few others.
Furthermore
, a plethora of changes were developed. First of all, there is a major reduction in the fiction
area. The fiction
section at the back is changed into non-fiction
. Then
, the left-wings area of fiction
is separated into four different categories now with cookery, hobbies, and art added. The previous spots for those sections are now replaced by cafe and table areas to provide a better experience for visitors. Lastly
, the entrance and front areas of the place remained the same.Submitted by elissa223 on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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