The diagram shows the life cycle of a butterfly.

The diagram shows the life cycle of a butterfly.
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The diagram shows the life cycle of a butterfly. The process represents the cycle of
insect’s
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an insect’s
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life. Butterfly hatches from the egg and becomes a caterpillar. It curls up into the chrysalis and waits
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for the
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right season. After some time a butterfly gets out with the chrysalis and an adult emerges. We can see that a butterfly is born, as
egg
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an egg
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.
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, it hatches from
egg
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an egg
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and emerges
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as
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caterpillar
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the caterpillar
a caterpillar
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. Caterpillar is a future butterfly, which can not fly yet , but can crawl .
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this
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part of the cycle, the insect curls up into
cocoon
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a cocoon
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and evolves in it.
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, in the cocoon, the insect has wings. After it comes out of the chrysalis, it becomes an adult butterfly.
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