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The table illustrates the projected costings during the five years in American dollars for three environmental strategies for stable forestry, whilst the pie chart presents the anticipated expenses distributed by four sectors in the first year.

The table illustrates the projected costings during the five years in American dollars for three environmental strategies for stable forestry, whilst the pie chart presents the anticipated expenses distributed by four sectors in the first year.
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The table shows predictions
expenses
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 for
three
 environmental projects that
dedicated
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are dedicated
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for
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to
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 forest protection. The pie chart depicts expected
spendings
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spending
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 for
first
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year
 of
projects
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 creation. It is noticeable that the most expensive project is going to be
South-east Asian
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Southeast Asia
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 and the
least
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last
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 one is West
African
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Africa
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. Half of
projected
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the projected
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 expenditure will go to
salaries
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the salaries
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 of employees. It is interesting to note that for
West
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 African project most of
investment
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the investment
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 will be in
a
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the
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 first
year
 - 10.5
million
, in next
year
 is planned to spend
for
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three
million
 less. Almost the same situation in Central America, for the first
year
 the biggest number and
after
this
 there is a decline in
spendings
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spending
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, followed by
three
 years of steady expenses.
South-east
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Southeast
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 Asian project is the most expensive among those
three
, with
overall
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 costing around 140
million
, which is
for
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115
million
 more than for West
African
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Africa
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.
Overall
, salaries are the biggest part of projected expenditures.
Also
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 30% of
budget
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the budget
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 will go to set-ups.
For trainings
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 and office expenses will be dedicated
20
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% of
budget
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the budget
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words three, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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