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The graph below shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the US state of Oregon

The graph below shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the US state of Oregon
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The graph depicts dynamic changes in
population
 among three
cities
 in the state of Oregon in
period
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the period
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 between 1940 and 2000.
Overall
, there is a demographical
rose
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 in all three
cities
.
However
, Washington had
the
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an
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 increase in
number
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a number
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 of citizens. It is evident from the data that, Columbies and Yamhill populations had been inclined by 1970. It is interesting to note that both those
cities
 started with approximately
same
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the same
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 numbers, and
in
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at
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 the end of
given
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the given
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period
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period,
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 both
cities
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city's
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citizen
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citizens numbers
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number
 increased
for
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to
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 around 45 thousand residents. The
period
 from 1970 to 2000 witnessed
rapid
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a rapid
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rose
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rise
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for
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of
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 30
thousands
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thousand
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of
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apply
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people.
While
 Columbia and Yamhill showed similar dynamics, Washington had
dramatic
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a dramatic
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 increase in
population
thought
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throughout
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given
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the given
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period
. The Washington
population
 more than tripled, starting from 75 and ending with 240 thousand, that
number
 is bigger than
population
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the population
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 of two other
cities
 combined. In
period
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the period
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 from 1970
till
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to
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2000
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2000,
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the
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apply
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Washingtons
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Washington
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resident
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residents
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number
 dramatically increased.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, cities, period, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population change
  • significant increase/decrease
  • growth rates
  • economic opportunities
  • migration patterns
  • environmental conditions
  • rapid growth/decline
  • industrial development
  • natural disasters
  • governmental policies
  • historical data
  • economic conditions
  • environmental sustainability
  • technological advancements
  • social implications
  • economic implications
  • environmental implications
  • infrastructure demands
  • natural resources
  • community life
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