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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph provides the number of tourists who visited three different locations in Europe during
period
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the period
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 from 1987 and 2007.The data
presented
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 in thousands.
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, it is clear from the graph that all three categories of traveler attractions witnessed an increase following years. In 1987, the
most
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largest part of
travelers
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travellers
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visited
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who visited
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 the coast which
wwas
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was
 exactly 40,000,
while
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 the
least
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last
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 one was the lakes accounted for 10,000 people.
Visitors
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 who travelled to the mountains
shows
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the
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 gradual rise from 20,000 to around 35,000
foreigner
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foreigners
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 in the following years. In terms of
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the coast
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coast
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cost
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, the number of individuals experienced
significant
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a significant
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 decline for 5 years, before growing sharply from approximately 35,000 to 75,000
visitors
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,
respectivel
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respectively
.
Similarly
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 to
this
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 figure, foreign opting for the lakes showed a dramatic increase between 1997 and 2002, with the highest peak of around 75,000
visitors
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,
whivh
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which
similar
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is similar
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 to the number of
visitors
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bisiting
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visiting
 the coast in 2007.
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, 2007 saw a rapid drop
till
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to
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 50,000 people.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuations
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • popular destination
  • significant changes
  • peak
  • trough
  • speculate
  • geopolitical events
  • attractiveness
  • positive outlook
  • challenges
  • tourism industry
  • overseas visitors
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