the chart gives information about entertainment venues and their admissions in 2009
The bar chart
ccompares
the statistics of Correct your spelling
compares
attendancy
at entertainment places, Correct your spelling
attendance
whereas
the table shows the data on the tickets
prices of certain events in 2009.
Change the noun form
ticket
Overall
, most of
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apply
the
people Correct article usage
apply
preferred
to watch movies at cinemas, rather than Wrong verb form
prefer
visiting
sports and theme parks. Wrong verb form
visit
Additionally
, cinema tickets
were the cheapest, while
watching Australian Football was the most expensive experience.
To begin
, according to
the attendency
bar graph, more than 1000 people went to the cinema accounting for the highest number. Correct your spelling
attendance
tendency
In contrast
, only about 180 individuals travelled to watch sports, followed by about 380 visitors walking to the theme park in 2009.
Furthermore
, those who chose to watch a cricket game or a movie at the cinema spent the least amount of money with
15$ and 24$ for a single ticket, respectively. Change preposition
apply
Converserly
, single(75$) and family (298$ for 4 people) Correct your spelling
Conversely
tickets
for a football game (AFL) had the highest rate as well
as
NRL Correct word choice
and
tickets
Wrong verb form
were
being
slightly more reasonable Wrong verb form
were
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at
with
73$ per Change preposition
at
Correct pronoun usage
apply
one
person and 290$ for a group of four.Correct pronoun usage
apply
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