Some people think that children should be taught to be competitive in school. Others, however, say that cooperation and team working skills are more important. Discuss bothe sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.

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A discourse about culture in schools
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resulted in various
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, some people think it is fundamental to teach competitiveness.
While
others say they should be taught to cooperate and work in a team. From the deepest of my heart, my standpoint
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to the latter.
To begin
with, teaching students to be competitive might be a good thing as it harsens their survival mode.
Moreover
, it
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taught them that to get what they want they should be hard workers.
As a result
, they will be
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with
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of achievements. Regardless, there are various downsides
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it.
Firstly
, they will be highly ambitious
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everything
possible to get what they want sometimes even
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harmful things,
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as cheating.
Secondly
, it creates individualistic children
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only care for themselves and
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the surrounding environment.
On the other hand
, teaching children cooperation and
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skills will bring various benefits.
Firstly
, it will surely
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them to lower their ego and accept differences in life.
Secondly
, by doing so, they will be able to develop and grow together as a means to pursue their goals respectively.
Thirdly
, it will
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them closer to one another,
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a sense of belonging to always help and look out
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other. Fourthly, those two skills are fundamental
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will be needed even in the workforce. Fifthly, as a social creature, they will not be able to live alone,
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of skills will make them an integral part of the community.
To sum up
,
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others say that competitiveness is important to be taught in school. I do believe that teaching them to work in a team and to
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will be keys to a better life with a variety kind of benefits in the long run.
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Introduction
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