The table below gives give information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in five countries in 2009

The table below gives give information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers

in five countries in 2009
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The table provides data about the salaries of secondary/high
school
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teachers
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In Australia, Denmark,
Luxembourg
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, Korea and Japan in 2009.
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, in 2009
Luxembourg
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had the highest starting
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, annual
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and maximum
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of
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secondary/high
school
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teachers
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. As can clearly be seen,
Luxembourg
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had the highest starting
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of secondary/high
school
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teachers
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with 80000
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,
whereas
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Japan had the lowest starting
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with 28000
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. The salaries of secondary/high
school
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teachers
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in Korea and Australia are pretty similar accounting for 30500 and 34600
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respectively.
Luxembourg
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had the highest annual
salary
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(112000
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) and maximum
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(139000
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) of secondary/high
school
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teachers
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. Australia had the lowest annual
salary
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and maximum
salary
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of secondary/high
school
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teachers
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accounting for 48000
dollars
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. The annual
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and maximum
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of secondary and high
school
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teachers
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in Denmark was the same in 2009 accounting for 54000
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. In 2009 Denmark had the lowest
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years
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taken to reach
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salary
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with 8
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,
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Korea had the highest
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years
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taken to reach
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with 37
years
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, teachers, luxembourg, salary, dollars, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondary/high school teachers
  • annual salary
  • gross income
  • net salary
  • cost of living
  • education funding
  • gender pay gap
  • teaching hours
  • years of experience
  • additional qualifications
  • economic indicators
  • average wage
  • currency conversion
  • educational disparities
  • international comparison
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