THE ADVANTAGES AND DİSADVANTAGES OF OWNİNG A CAR/BİCYCLE

1. It is known that owning a
car
is
the
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piece of our life. With
cars
,we can go easily wherever we want.With the invention of the
car
,our life is faster than past.And the bicycles are like
cars
but without
fuel
.So,we will learn the advantages and disadvantages of owning a
car
and
bicycle
in the rest of
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. 2.One of the advantages of owning a
car
is that it makes our life easier.
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,in the past people used animals for transportation and it took days
get
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to their destination.And of
course
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course,
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it was bad for the animals like horses because they had to walk for miles.So,with the invention of
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the car
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car
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car,
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we can easily
arrive
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get
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wherever we want. The biggest advantage of
bicycle
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a bicycle
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is that it can used without any
fuel
.It is good for
environment
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the environment
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.Because the
fuel
pollute the air and it
effects
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affects
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our health. 3.
According to
this
information,we can know that using
car
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cars
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pollute the air because of the
fuel
.
The most
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of
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apply
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people have their
cars
and the effects of
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pollution can be observed. The disadvantage of
the
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owning
bicycle
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a bicycle
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is that we can't
use
them in
the
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bad weather conditions.It is too dangerous because
bicyles
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bicycles
don't have any
measure
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measures
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againts
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against
getting wet.
Car
is safer than bicycles in the rain. And
the
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apply
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both of them
makes
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make
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us lazy because people prefer using
cars
/bicycles rather than
walk
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walking
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short distances.It can
caused
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cause
be caused
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many health problems. 4.In my opinion,owning a
car
better
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is better
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than
bicycle
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a bicycle
the bicycle
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.Because
bicycle
requires
lot
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a lot
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of energy.And with the
car
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car,
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we can go long distances.Of
course
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course,
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we can
use
bicyles
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bicycles
for going long distances but
bicycle
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the bicycle
a bicycle
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is less
comfartable
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comfortable
than
cars
. If we know to
use
them with less damage and
problem
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problems
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,it is the best thing.We must know
that
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apply
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how can we
use
them without
pollute
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polluting
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the air and
harm
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harming
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ourselves.
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