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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

It is sometimes said that countries should produce all the food for their populations to eat and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is a controversial notion heating a debate
over
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that the nation should produce all goods for their populations
for
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to
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 eat
with
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 carrying less import . From my point of view ,I consider myself
proponent
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a proponent
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 of
this
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 statement .
First,
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if
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country
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the country
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produce
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 all
food
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 for their people
then
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this
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 would save a lot of money
of
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for
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government
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the government
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 and invest that money
to
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in
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 new technology in
advancement
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the advancement
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 of
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food
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the food
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 category.
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 , from immemorial time , human has
bring
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brought
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 new varieties of
food
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due to
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 their insatiable greed for taste and quality.
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canada
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Canada
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 consume rice from
india
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India
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 but
nowdays
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nowadays
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canada
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Canada
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 has grown up
their
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its
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 own rice fields and making a profit in large
amount
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.
Secondly
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 , if the import is less
then
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 it would be
benefit
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 for the local
busniess
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business
businesses
 to sell more
food
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 and the economic growth of the
country
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 would increase .
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 , in past ,
canada
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Canada
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recieves
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received
 some part of the coffee from England .
This
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hinder
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 the growth of the
country
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 and
create
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creates
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less
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 job opportunities for the people .
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 , it would be
benificial
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beneficial
 for the locals to produce
food
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with in
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within
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the
country
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. In conclusion , the favourable influences of the production of
food
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 for all human beings
with in
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within
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 a
country
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 are undisputed .
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 , it is
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a necessity
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necessity
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a necessity
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of
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for
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the government
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government
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the government
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 to
intiate
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initiate
 the process of
food
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 with their
country
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 so that citizens can
also
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get
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apply
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apply
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the
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benefit.
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