There is an increasing trend around the world towards having a small family rather than a large family. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays, there is a significant rise in the
number
of Use synonyms
people
who prefer having a small family Use synonyms
instead
of a large Linking Words
one
. In Use synonyms
this
essay, I will explain why the benefits of having a small family overshadow the drawbacks.
On the Linking Words
one
hand, owning a small family can lead to two challenges. Use synonyms
Firstly
, you will have a limited Linking Words
number
of family members. In Use synonyms
this
world, you often need support from others, and your family is usually the first place you turn to. If you have a small family, you only have a few Linking Words
people
to reach out to. To illustrate, in financial difficulties when the bank is not an option, it becomes hard to find Use synonyms
the
support. The next reason is, sometimes, you might feel lonely because you only have Correct article usage
apply
small
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a small
the small
number
of Use synonyms
people
around to share Use synonyms
feeling
with. In fact, Replace the word
feelings
this
lack of interaction will hinder the development of Linking Words
children’s
because they are not used to interacting with many different Change noun form
children
people
. Use synonyms
Consequently
, Linking Words
this
may impact their ability to make friends.
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On the other hand
, despite Linking Words
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drawbacks, I would argue there are more benefits to Correct determiner usage
these
this
trend. Linking Words
Firstly
, each family member will be closer to Linking Words
one
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and
another. As we know, there are a lot of Correct word choice
apply
people
not close even with their parents because they need to take care Use synonyms
many
children. Change preposition
of many
However
, with Linking Words
a
fewer Correct article usage
apply
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number of
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family
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a family
member
, parents have much time Fix the agreement mistake
members
focus
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to focus
with
their children and no Change preposition
on
one
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felt
left behind. Wrong verb form
feels
Last
and the main benefit is small Linking Words
family
often have better financial stability. With fewer members, the family will have Fix the agreement mistake
families
less
financial burden that will affect Add an article
a less
the less
to
effective Change preposition
apply
resources
allocation, which Change the noun form
resource
consist
of insurance, education, and lifestyle and amplified to Change the verb form
consists
higher
quality of life.
In conclusion, Add an article
a higher
the higher
while
having a small family will make things difficult for some Linking Words
people
when it comes to Use synonyms
need
support, Change the verb form
needing
small
family will maintain your relationship with other family members Correct article usage
a small
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also
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and also
mostly
easier to Rephrase
make it
achieved
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achieve
better
quality of life. Correct article usage
a better
Therefore
, I am fully convinced that the demerits are eclipsed by the merits.Linking Words
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