The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of a large fish called the salmon.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of a large fish called the salmon.
The diagram illustrates the life span of a huge fish which is known as salmon. In
this
process, the salmon passes through three different stages as it grows
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an adult fish. Each of these stages takes place in a
varient
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variety
aquatic
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manner
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. At the very first level, salmon lay eggs around the rocks, hidden among reeds at
slow moving
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upper river. After approximately 5 to 6 months, these are called
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fry and grow 3 to 8 cm in length. For the next 4-5 years, these baby salmons live in lower freshwater which is fast flowing. During
this
period, their size changes
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12-15cm and
are
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called
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smolt. At
this
level, they move towards
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sea from
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river. After spending almost 5 years, they convert into adult salmons as their size increases and now they are seventy to
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centimetres long.
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, they again swim to their
birth place
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where they will lay eggs and the cycle starts again.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Life cycle
  • Spawning
  • Freshwater
  • Juvenile
  • Fry
  • Adaptation
  • Migration
  • Smolt
  • Rivers
  • Ocean
  • Challenge
  • Growth
  • Return journey
  • Hatching ground
  • Perilous
  • Upstream
  • Obstacle
  • Ecological impact
  • Preservation
  • Disturbance
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