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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is an increasing number of
people
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 who are interested in excavating the
history
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 of the house or building where they live. I think
people
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 do that because they have the cognitive to protect the historical value of the
buildings
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 and the sense of connection that
people
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 felt within the exploration. In order to research their
history
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,
people
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 can gather the knowledge and memories that elder citizens around them have and go to the libraries in their cities. Many
buildings
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 with great historical value had been destroyed because of the wars and
people
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's ignorance in the past.
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, many
people
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 appeal for the protection of
buildings
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. After
people
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 have the cognitive to appreciate the beauty of historical
buildings
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,
people
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willing
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 to find out the
history
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 of the
buildings
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 in their own living places. What's more, the process of exploring the stories about the
buildings
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 in their cities enhances the connection between them. Because the forms of architecture are special
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 the unique elements a location has,
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 as weather and culture, these link everyone who lives there and make them feel united. In order to know the
history
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 of the building where they live, one of my suggestions is to ask the elders who
also
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 live there. Because they have more experiences since the more time they have lived, they might have experienced the changes of the time of these architectures. Another suggestion is going to local libraries and searching for the information which had been recorded on paper. In conclusion,
people
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's increasing interest in excavating the
history
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 of architecture in the place they live is
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 their cognitive
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protection after the destruction of many
buildings
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 and the sense of connection
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 given to explorers. My suggestions for explorers to reach
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 intention are asking the local elders for help and searching for information in local libraries.

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Develop your supporting ideas more fully and include a wider range of specific examples to better illustrate your points. Examples should be relevant and detailed to help the reader understand your ideas fully.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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