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An English-speaking friend wants to spend a two-week holiday in your region and has written asking for information and advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter offer to find somewhere for your friend to stay give advice about what to do and see in your area give information about what clothes to bring

#friend #holiday #region #information #advice #offer #area #clothes
Dear Maria, I hope you are doing well. I am writing in response to assist you
about
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 staying in my region. First of all, there are various accommodations near my house, which are
one
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 of the best-reviewed hotels in my hometown and I will send you their addresses.
Besides
this
, if something goes wrong, you can
also
 stay at my place.
Moreover
, my city is the place, where you cannot be bored. There are a large number of restaurants of many cuisines,
such
 as
:
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 Chinese, Indian, French, Italian, etc.
Additionally
,
nightlife
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 here is quite exciting, because we have top clubs and bars here.
Furthermore
, as I know about you, you are keen on skiing, so we can go there together.
Finally
, as I've mentioned
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 you before, winter here is quite cold. So, bring as many sweaters as you can, warm clothes and don't forget ski clothes. I hope to see you soon. Lots of love, Your friend, Soso
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coherence cohesion
Try to diversify your sentence structure more to improve flow and interest.
task achievement
Consider including more specific details or personal anecdotes to enrich your advice and offers.
coherence cohesion
Your letter is well-organized, with clear paragraphs for accommodation, activities, and advice on clothing, which aids understanding and coherence.
task achievement
You've maintained a friendly and informal tone throughout the letter, which is suitable for writing to a friend.
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