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The bar chart illustrate the three cumputer packages were downloaded through internet at different times in per week (from week1 to week5).

The bar chart illustrate the three cumputer packages were downloaded through internet at different times in per week (from week1 to week5).
The bar chart illustrates the weekly downloads of three distinct software packages through the web over the 5-
week
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 period.
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, as can be seen, the ActiveX was the most popular program,
while
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 the lowest was the Net.
Furthermore
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, unlike the Net, both ActiveX and Java steadily increased over the given time. In
Week
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 1, the ActiveX program was downloaded around 70 times. The figures for
this
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 package witnessed a considerable rise throughout a 5-
week
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 period and reached a peak in
Week
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 5, at roughly 120 downloads per
week
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.
Likewise
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, the statistics of Java doubled nearly from 40 installations in
Week
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 1 to 80 in
Week
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 5.
On the other hand
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, the number of people who installed the Net package declined significantly between the first and third weeks and saw around 13 downloads in
Week
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 3. After that, the statistics grew considerably and hit the highest point in
Week
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 5, at around 50 per
week
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words week with synonyms.
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