You have recently moved to a new apartment. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter: explain why you have moved describe your new apartment invite him/her to pay a visit

Dear Sonam, I hope you are doing well. You will be happy to hear that I moved to New York City,

last

week. As you know , I got admitted to Exercise Sciences at the University of New York, and my classes will start after next week. Currently, I am living in an apartment, which is located on the 24th floor of the building. It has some picture views as well, you can see the main falls of

this

location from my room. It has a guest room, television and a very beautiful balcony, which has some plants and 2 chairs.The downtown of the city is just one mile away. I got

this

news from your parents that your college has summer vacation from tomorrow onwards. It has been a very long time since we saw each other, and you always wanted to stay in New York and I

also

want to explore with you, as we promised during our school time. I hope you will come soon. I am so excited to hear you back. You can call me on 9053247889 and text me on same. Regards, Yours Vandana

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

190 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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