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You have recently moved to a new apartment. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter: explain why you have moved describe your new apartment invite him/her to pay a visit

#apartment #friend #visit
Dear Sonam, I hope you are doing well. You will be happy to hear that I moved to New York City,
last
 week. As you know , I got admitted to Exercise Sciences at the University of New York, and my classes will start after next week. Currently, I am living in an apartment, which is located on the 24th floor of the building. It has some picture views as well, you can see the main falls of
this
 location from my room. It has a guest room, television and a very beautiful balcony, which has some plants and 2 chairs.The downtown of the city is just one mile away. I got
this
 news from your parents that your college has summer vacation from tomorrow onwards. It has been a very long time since we saw each other, and you always wanted to stay in New York and I
also
 want to explore with you, as we promised during our school time. I hope you will come soon. I am so excited to hear you back. You can call me on 9053247889 and text me on same. Regards, Yours Vandana
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coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea and that the ideas flow logically from one to the other. Include more cohesive devices and transition words to connect sentences and paragraphs more effectively.
task achievement
To enhance task achievement, provide more detailed explanations and descriptions. Expand on the reasons for your move and provide more specific details about your new apartment. Include additional information regarding the potential visit, such as proposed activities or the best time to come.
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