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The table shows the population of three cities in 1990, the population forecast of 2000 and the actual of 2000.

The table shows the population of three cities in 1990, the population forecast of 2000 and the actual of 2000.
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The displayed table shows information about the actual and estimated report of the total of inhabitants in three contrasting cities during the period of time.
Overall
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,
while
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 the citizens living in
the
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Sao
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Paulo
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 and Jakarta reached
the
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a
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 significant peak in 1990 and 2000, the
declined
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 population was experienced in Shanghai in 2000.
On the other hand
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,
Sao
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Paulo
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 still dominated as the populous urban area in the following year given. In 1990,
Sao
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Paulo
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 was outlined as the highest
people
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 living in, at 15
million
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 outpaced Shanghai and Jakarta with 13,5 and 9,5 respectively. Meanwhile,
Sao
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Paulo
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 was assumed to gain more population in 2000 with 24
million
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, another area
such
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 as Jakarta,
forecasted
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is forecasted
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 to achieve its resurgence at 14
million
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 which is roughly
2
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a 2
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million
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 increase.
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, Shanghai experienced a slight fall in 1990 for the actual citizens with just around one
million
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 from 13,5 to 12,5 and was expected to touch the higher number of community in 2000 with 17
million
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.
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