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The bar charts describe how much time a teacher spent at three school levels in four different countries in 2001.

The bar charts describe how much time a teacher spent at three school levels in four different countries in 2001.
the bar chart shows how much
time
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 a
teacher
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 spent
time
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 at 3 academy
level
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 in 4 different countries in 2001. following
to
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the data,
USA
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teacher
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 spent their
time
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 in school over 700
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hour
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hours
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 primary
level
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, over 1000
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hour
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hours
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 in lower secondary, and over 1100 in upper secondary.
differing
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 from
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USA
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the USA
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,
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Japan
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Japanese
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teacher
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teachers
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 spent
more
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less
time
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 than
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USA
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the USA
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. it shows
japan
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teacher
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teachers
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 only spent 600
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hour
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hours
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in
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on
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primary
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the primary
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level
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,
less
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and less
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 than 700
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hour
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hours
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 both
on
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in
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lower
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the lower
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 secondary and upper secondary.
similiar
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Similar
 to
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japan
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Japan
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,
iceland
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Iceland
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teacher
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 spent
their
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apply
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less
600
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than 600
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hour
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hours
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in
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at
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primary
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the primary
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 and secondary
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level
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levels
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. unlike
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japan
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Japanese
show examples
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teacher
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teachers
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 in
iceland
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Iceland
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 spent over 900 in upper secondary. next
spain
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span
Spain
, the gap between each
level
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significant
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is significant
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.
on
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At
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primary
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a primary
the primary
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level
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level,
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 they spent over 600
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hour
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hours
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, over 700
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hour
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hours
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 on
lower
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the lower
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 secondary
Linking Words
lastly
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and lastly
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 900
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hour
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hours
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 spent on
upper
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the upper
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 secondary. despite
this
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,
japan
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 slightly increased each degree and
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USA
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the USA
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 grew about 200
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hour
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hours
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 more each
time
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time, teacher, level, usa, hour, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar charts, time allocation, primary education, lower secondary level, upper secondary level
  • teacher workload, classroom hours, non-teaching duties
  • educational system, comparative analysis, pedagogic practices
  • instructional time, professional development, teacher's responsibilities
  • discrepancies, workload distribution, teaching hours
  • statistical data, time management, educators, pedagogues
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