The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.
The graph shows the number of people taking
parts
in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Fix the agreement mistake
part
To begin
with, badminton takes the lowest place on the graph and the number of people who took part in it remained flat, since
1985 until 2005. Basketball , Change preposition
from
that
comes Correct pronoun usage
which
next,
located
between numbers 50 and 100, the diagram of Add a missing verb
is located
this
sport looks almost the same with
badminton , except Change preposition
as
the
number of participants, which was higher. On Change preposition
for the
contrary
, basketball increased from 150 in 1985 to nearly 220 in 2005, that sport has the biggest indicators on the graph. Correct article usage
the contrary
Instead
, rugby radically reduced from 240 numbers of people to 50 in 2005. But, the thing is, that tennis and rugby had something in common. It is the same point, which was formed in the year of
1995 at the mark of 200 participants. And Change preposition
apply
finally
we see the huge difference in Add a comma
finally,
growth
and reduction of sports.Correct article usage
the growth
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