Some people think more public money should be spent on roads and motorways than on public transport systems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is
agued
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that more public funds should be invested
on
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making
roads
and motorways rather than use them investing
on
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in
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public
transportation
.I totally
disagrees
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disagree
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with the
arguement
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argument
of
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road
and
mortorway
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motorway
motorways
expenditure
instead
of encouraging public transport because it causes
trafic
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traffic
congestion and environmental pollution.
Firstly
, proponents who agree with the option to invest public funds for new
road
systems lead them
increase
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an increase
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in
road
traffic
.It can be noticeable that some countries still focus on implementing new highways and
roads
by discouraging public transport which
lead
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a
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large number of own vehicles on those
roads
that occur unnecessary
trafic
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traffic
jams.People always prefer the most
convienient
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convenient
way for their journey and tend to select their private cars
due to
lack
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the lack
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of
public
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a public
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transportation
system.
For example
, Nigeria has the highest
traffic
index at 304.8 and
lack
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a lack
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of public
transportation
.
On the other hand
, investing money
on
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roads
and motorways would
increase
environmental
polution
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pollution
.If
road
systems are better, people will tend to use their own vehicles
and
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apply
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which
lead
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leads
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increase
in
traffic
jams which would negatively affect on environment.Co2
emmision
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emission
will
increase
and it may cause global temperature to
increase
lead global warming.
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, more than 48% of CO2
are
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is
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from vehicles in the world. In conclusion,
this
essay disagrees with the option
for
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of
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investing money
on
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in
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roads
and motorways
is
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are
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more compulsary
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compulsary
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compulsory
than
on
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in
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public
transportation
because the consequences of using public funds on new
road
systems will cause
traffic
congestion and environmental pollution.
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