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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

Some people think more public money should be spent on roads and motorways than on public transport systems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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agued
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 that more public funds should be invested
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 making
roads
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 and motorways rather than use them investing
on
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in
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 public
transportation
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.I totally
disagrees
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 with the
arguement
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argument
of
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for
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road
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 and
mortorway
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motorway
motorways
 expenditure
instead
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 of encouraging public transport because it causes
trafic
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traffic
 congestion and environmental pollution.
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, proponents who agree with the option to invest public funds for new
road
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 systems lead them
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increase
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 in
road
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traffic
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.It can be noticeable that some countries still focus on implementing new highways and
roads
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 by discouraging public transport which
lead
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a
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large number of own vehicles on those
roads
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 that occur unnecessary
trafic
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traffic
 jams.People always prefer the most
convienient
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convenient
 way for their journey and tend to select their private cars
due to
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lack
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the lack
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 of
public
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a public
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transportation
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 system.
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, Nigeria has the highest
traffic
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 index at 304.8 and
lack
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a lack
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 of public
transportation
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.
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, investing money
on
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roads
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 and motorways would
increase
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 environmental
polution
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pollution
.If
road
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 systems are better, people will tend to use their own vehicles
and
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which
lead
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leads
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increase
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 in
traffic
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 jams which would negatively affect on environment.Co2
emmision
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emission
 will
increase
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 and it may cause global temperature to
increase
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 lead global warming.
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, more than 48% of CO2
are
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 from vehicles in the world. In conclusion,
this
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 essay disagrees with the option
for
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 investing money
on
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in
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roads
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 and motorways
is
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are
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more compulsary
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compulsary
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compulsory
 than
on
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 because the consequences of using public funds on new
road
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 systems will cause
traffic
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 congestion and environmental pollution.
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Introduction
Make sure your introduction includes a clear thesis statement that reflects your view.
Coherence
Ensure coherence by using a range of linking devices and paragraphing effectively.
Cohesion
Support your main points with specific examples and explanations.
Task Response
Fully address all parts of the task to ensure a complete response. Present a balanced argument if the question requires it.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Infrastructure
  • Transportation
  • Congestion
  • Economy
  • Carbon emissions
  • Pollution
  • Social inclusion
  • Urban development
  • Efficient
  • Investment
  • Reliance
  • Boosting
  • Affordable
  • Private vehicle users
  • Public transport system
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