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The graph below illustrates the amount of travellers using three main airports between 1995 and 2000 in New York City.

The graph below illustrates the amount of travellers using three main airports between 1995 and 2000 in New York City.
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The bar chart compared the average tourist utilization of three central airports, namely John F. Kennedy,
LaGuardia
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, and Newark, in
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the 5-year
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 period from 1995 to 2000.
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, it can be seen that the level of passengers departing and arriving at
LaGuardia
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 has increased among two other places. John F. Kennedy had
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fluctuative
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fluctuating
 trends from time to time, depicted by the data where it started at roughly 27
million
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of
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tourists, right behind
LaGuardia
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 and just above Newark. They put up the work to eventually
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 the percentage of
LaGuardia
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 in 1997, specifically 48
million
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visitors. But somehow, from 1998 to 1999 the usage of
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 airport decreased by almost 15
million
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 and gained the use of its place in 2000.
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,
LaGuardia
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 drew a steady rise, starting from 35
million
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airport users in 1995, slowly working its way by 3-6
million
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 per year, and had a tremendous level-up in 2000 with the exact number of 69
million
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.
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, Newark seems to be the calmest flow, where it starts at 15
million
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, carefully keeping its way up to 39
million
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 in 1997, and slightly increase 1
million
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 until 2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words laguardia, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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