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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement ? People should read only those books that are about real events l, real people, and established facts. Use specific and details to support your opinion.

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There are competing views on whether to read only books, which are based on real actions. Personally, I guess that all books are giving huge opportunities, so it is incorrect to peruse only
this
 type of novel.
Although
, a significant number of individuals hold opinions, that it is not rational to read other genres.
Firstly
, people who resist reading books in any kind of genre, except scientific, historical or non-fictional may prefer to know about real occurrences, rather than imagined ones. When individuals read a book, which is based on legacy actions in any time of people's existence, they can be sure about the truth of those facts and they most likely will not be frustrated by the lost time, they spent on reading those things.
However
, from my experience,
this
 type of person is usually boredoms, and can not use their fantasy or is too anxious about skipping things in the real world.
For instance
, my friend reads only scientific novels, because he thinks it is giving him an enormous amount of knowledge, with
this
 part I agree.
Nevertheless
, he defies perusing any other types of novels, since it is a waste of time for him, which is understandable,
due to
 the fact that he is afraid of escaping from realness, and
consequently
, missing things.
On the other hand
, the part of society, which prefers to read fantasy, romantic and all the other genres with unreal scenarios is more detached from reality. Their brains work differently,
due to
 developed parts, like imagination. It gives them big opportunities, which may help them at work.
For example
, it might improve your thinking about solutions to problems, because you have great creativity. In conclusion, I will stick to the part of society, that reads all styles of manuscripts.
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coherence cohesion
Strive to integrate a clear introductory paragraph that explicitly states your opinion on the topic, ensuring it addresses the prompt directly. This will guide the reader through your argument and set the stage for your essay.
coherence cohesion
Aim to have a conclusion that not only summarizes the main points but also restates your position in relation to the prompt. Make sure this ties in neatly with the rest of the essay.
task achievement
Develop the main points in your paragraphs by supporting them with specific examples. Instead of making general statements, use concrete evidence that will fortify your argument.
coherence cohesion
Organize the ideas and arguments in your essay in a logical manner. Ensure there are clear connections between sentences and paragraphs. Transition words can help with the flow and structure of the essay.
task achievement
Work on expressing ideas clearly and comprehensively. Strive for precision in language and syntax to communicate your stance effectively. This involves using a variety of sentence structures and vocabulary.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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