You play a team sport with some friends. Last week a member of the team had an accident and wasn't able to play with you Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: • Tell him which team won • Describe the weather conditions that day • Say how you felt about the match
Dear Sam,
How are you feeling? I'm writing to you to inform you we played well
last
week.
Even though the team
against us played well, we won the match. I scored twice and they could not score us, because our other goalkeeper played well enough to cover you that time. My other goal did not process, the referee decided that was offside.
I must tell you that it was a tough match due to
the wet and cold weather. It was raining a lot with freezing wind. Also
when I saw the news, the forecast said that it was the wettest day of the season when we played. But, we were lucky that it wasn't snowing. Otherwise
, the match would have been delayed.
The pitch wasn't in
good quality with the rain, Change preposition
of
however
, it was a fabulous competition between us and away. Yet, we should have played better with more pressure on the other team
. I also
realized that we should focus on how to play like a team
. The reason I am saying this
is because,
there was more individual than Remove the comma
apply
team
play.
Look after yourself well while
you are staying at the hospital. I hope you'll reunite us soon.
Best Wishes,Submitted by matillazeyrek on
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph presents a clear main idea and is well-developed with sufficient detail.
coherence cohesion
Use a wider variety of linking words and phrases to better connect ideas and paragraphs.
task achievement
Address all bullet points from the prompt equally to fully satisfy the task achievement criterion. The section about your feelings towards the match could be expanded.
task achievement
Maintain a suitable tone throughout the letter, which is generally good, but always check to ensure consistency in register and style.
overall
Make sure the letter has a clear introduction, body paragraphs dedicated to each point, and a suitable conclusion.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite