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Although the prices of fuels have greatly increased over the last decade or two, it is argued that further increases in fuel prices are the only way to reduce world consumption of fuel and lesson pressure on worlds fuel resources To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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We live in
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 era where the destruction of the environment to support fossil energy becoming urgent to solve. To decrease
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 problem, authorities are implementing expensive prices for
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 not eco-friendly source.
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 agree that in
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 way lower-income individuals cannot afford these destructive fuels and push innovation to other alternatives,
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, drivers of public transportation may have difficulty with
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 rule. The high rate of gases is very fundamental to saving
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 earth by limiting access to some classes and bringing about a new innovation.
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 argue that poor
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 have less education in terms of understanding the urge to use eco-friendly power sources. Implementing
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 is going to be an effective way to reduce
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 with low awareness of the environment.
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,
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 will seek another alternative
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 as an electric car that provides zero emission for their vehicle.
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, there are several drivers that depending their income on public transportation. These drivers usually pay for the gases by themselves using the money they make by driving on passengers. In
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 case, the driver will have more than struggle to keep up with the price.
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, eco-friendly public transportation is massively growing and the government has the power to replace the old vehicles with new zero-emission ones. In conclusion, even though the transition struggle will be faced by several individuals, I personally agree that the idea of increasing fuel prices is effective in bringing about finite access and change in conveyance.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the introduction and conclusion clearly state your position on the topic and summarize the main points of the essay.
coherence cohesion
Work on linking ideas more effectively throughout the essay. Using a wider range of cohesive devices can improve the flow of the essay.
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Develop your main points with more supportive details and examples to strengthen your argument.
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Ensure that your essay directly addresses the prompt and maintains a consistent response to the question throughout.
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Try to offer a balanced view by discussing reasons for both sides of the argument before concluding with your own opinion.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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