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The table below gives information about bakery's average sales in three different branches in 2015.

The table below gives information about bakery's average sales in three different branches in 2015.
#information #bakery #sales #three #branches
The table above
is
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shows
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the averages
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averages
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average
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 sales information at three branches in 2015.
Most
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The most
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 popular menu in
three
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the three
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 shops
are
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is
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 Georgia
street
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Street
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 with chicken
burger
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burgers
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, Dunsmuir
street
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Street
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 with chicken wings and Drake
street
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Street
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 with chicken pasta. It can
bes
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be
 seen that the sales at Georgia
street
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Street
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 got higher
transactions
 as many as 854
item
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items
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 with
price
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a price
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$
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of $
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10.69,
following
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followed
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 by the middle
transactions
 at Dunsmuir
street
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Street
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 as
much
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many
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 as 750
item
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items
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 with
price
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a price
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$
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of $
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5.61 and the lower
transactions
 by Drake
street
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Street
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 with 390
item
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items
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 with price $9.02. In conclusion,
had
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there was
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 a difference
sales
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in sales
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 for each branch with
a
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the
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number
eat-in
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of eat-in
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transactions
 and take-away
transactions
 in detail. In Georgia with
a
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the
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number
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numbers
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 405 and 449,
and
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apply
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the second in Dunsmuir with
a
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apply
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number
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numbers
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358 dan 392, and the
last
 in Drake with
a
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the
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number
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numbers
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 200 and 190.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words street, transactions, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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