The effective way to reduce industrial pollution is to tax the companies that cause them. Discuss both views, and give your opinion.
Nowadays,
government
should add Add an article
the government
taxes
to throw away a industrial rubbish
to reduce it. From my point of view, Remove the article
industrial rubbish
a pile of industrial rubbish
this
decision will work and change this
culture significantly. Because owners of factories will try to make something that will decrease industrial pollution
. Moreover
, taxes
for rub will increase economy
of countries.
As it is obvious, people always do things that can increase their profit or save from Add an article
the economy
wasting
. So it means directors of factories will open new Replace the word
waste
technologies
to stop making a
waste. Because owners do not want to pay big Correct article usage
apply
taxes
. For example
, when Japan was making a new types
of Correct the article-noun agreement
a new type
new types
engines
Fix the agreement mistake
engine
to
a car. Change preposition
for
Government
added Add an article
The government
taxes
for all their motors
except alliminium
Correct your spelling
aluminium
motors
, that
they never created. Correct word choice
which
However
, enginers
created Correct your spelling
engineers
alliminium
Correct your spelling
aluminium
motors
and get
rid of Wrong verb form
got
taxes
in 6 months. So that means if politics add taxes
for factories
Fix the agreement mistake
factory
pollution
, it will cause to creating
Replace the word
creation
new
Change preposition
of new
technologies
to minimize industrial pollution
.
The second beneficial side that
Correct word choice
apply
it
is that countries will Correct pronoun usage
apply
rise
Correct your spelling
raise
up
their economy. Because to create things that will stop air Change preposition
apply
pollution
or water pollution
takes much time. Also
, government
will get a big amount of money from Add an article
the government
taxes
until they create technologies
. But that techs can not full
stop wasting. So Change the adjective
fully
government
will get a little amount of money whatever it takes. Add an article
the government
For example
, when Japan's enginers
created Correct your spelling
engineers
alliminium
engines. That Correct your spelling
aluminium
bypass
Correct subject-verb agreement
bypasses
taxes
. They were
Change the verb form
have also left
also
left Change preposition
with another
another types
of Replace the adjective
another type
other types
motors
that they should use. So companies paid less Fix the agreement mistake
motor
taxes
but politics not
stopped getting money.
In conclusion, adding Add a missing verb
has not
taxes
to industrial pollution
will stop it until 90% and causes
to making Correct subject-verb agreement
cause
a
new Correct article usage
apply
technologies
. Also
, it will increase government's
economy.Correct article usage
the government's
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