The effective way to reduce industrial pollution is to tax the companies that cause them. Discuss both views, and give your opinion.

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Nowadays,
government
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the government
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should add
taxes
to throw away
a industrial rubbish
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industrial rubbish
a pile of industrial rubbish
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to reduce it. From my point of view,
this
decision will work and change
this
culture significantly. Because owners of factories will try to make something that will decrease industrial
pollution
.
Moreover
,
taxes
for rub will increase
economy
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the economy
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of countries. As it is obvious, people always do things that can increase their profit or save from
wasting
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. So it means directors of factories will open new
technologies
to stop making
a
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waste. Because owners do not want to pay big
taxes
.
For example
, when Japan was making
a new types
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of
engines
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engine
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to
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a car.
Government
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The government
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added
taxes
for all their
motors
except
alliminium
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aluminium
motors
,
that
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which
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they never created.
However
,
enginers
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engineers
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created
alliminium
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aluminium
motors
and
get
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got
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rid of
taxes
in 6 months. So that means if politics add
taxes
for
factories
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factory
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pollution
, it will cause to
creating
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new
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of new
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technologies
to minimize industrial
pollution
. The second beneficial side
that
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it
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is that countries will
rise
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raise
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up
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their economy. Because to create things that will stop air
pollution
or water
pollution
takes much time.
Also
,
government
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the government
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will get a big amount of money from
taxes
until they create
technologies
. But that techs can not
full
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fully
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stop wasting. So
government
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the government
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will get a little amount of money whatever it takes.
For example
, when Japan's
enginers
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engineers
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created
alliminium
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aluminium
engines. That
bypass
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bypasses
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taxes
. They
were
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have also left
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also
left
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with another
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another types
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another type
other types
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of
motors
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motor
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that they should use. So companies paid less
taxes
but politics
not
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has not
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stopped getting money. In conclusion, adding
taxes
to industrial
pollution
will stop it until 90% and
causes
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cause
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to making
a
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new
technologies
.
Also
, it will increase
government's
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the government's
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economy.
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