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The table below gives information about bakery's average sales in three different branches in 2015.

The table below gives information about bakery's average sales in three different branches in 2015.
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The given table illustrates the data of sales of a bakery in three different stores in Vancouver in 2015, which are Georgia
Street
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, Dunsmuir
Street
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 and
Drake
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Street
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. The information on the table includes
a
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the
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number
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 of
transactions
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, transaction value,
eat-in
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transactions
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, take-away
transactions
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, and most popular items.
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, it can be clearly seen that the Georgia
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 store has the highest figure in all average data. The
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 items in all branches were made of
chicken
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. As the table shows, Georgia
Street
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 has the biggest
number
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 in terms of a
number
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 of
transactions
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 accounting for 854 pcs and the value of
transactions
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 stands at $10.69.
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, the
number
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 of
eat-in
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 and take-away
transactions
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 constituted 405 and 449, respectively. The most popular item was the
Chicken
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 burger. Regarding the other branches,
Dunsmir
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Street
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 was in the second position with 750
transactions
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,
whereas
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Drake
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Street
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 has almost half the
number
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 from the
Dunsmir
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 branch. Despite the
Dunsmir
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Street
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 branch having a higher transaction, the transaction value was lower than the
Drake
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Street
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 branch, with $5.61 in
Dunsmir
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 and $9.02 in
Drake
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.
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, take-away sales in Dunsmuir were higher at 392 compared with
eat-in
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 sales at 358.
However
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, a different trend occurred in
Drake
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Street
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 with 200
eat-in
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transactions
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 10 pcs higher than the take-away.
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, the best seller's goods were
chicken
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 wings in Dunsmuir
Street
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 and
chicken
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 pasta in
Drake
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Street
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words street, drake, number, transactions, eat-in, chicken, dunsmir with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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