Some people dislike changes in their society and in their own lives, and want things to stay the same. Why do some people want things to stay the same? Why should change be regarded as something positive? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.
The fear of uncertainty is universal among human beings. We want our public and personal lives to always be stable and predictable.
However
, Linking Words
change
is inevitable and Use synonyms
actually
the impetus for Add a comma
actually,
revolution
of our society and ourselves, so Add an article
the revolution
a revolution
that
we should welcome Correct word choice
apply
change
and flow with it.
First of all, it's in our nature to stick with familiar things rather than Use synonyms
to
try something new. Fix the infinitive
apply
For example
, individuals who used to be abused in their childhood tend to be attracted by Linking Words
abusing
partners. Replace the word
abusive
That is
because in our unconsciousness Linking Words
familarity
is always associated with safety Correct your spelling
familiarity
while
Linking Words
change
is often associated Use synonyms
danger
. Change preposition
with danger
This
principle works the same on Linking Words
group
level. People who Add an article
a group
the group
suffered
from a dictatorship government Wrong verb form
suffer
are not necessarily want
Change the verb form
do not necessarily want
revolotion
. They are used to the Correct your spelling
revolution
resolution
abusing
of power and have Replace the word
abuse
develop
a series of adaptive lifestyles and mental states Change the verb form
developed
such
asLinking Words
give
up Wrong verb form
giving
your
agency and Correct pronoun usage
their
rely
on a powerful other. Wrong verb form
relying
Change
in society means Use synonyms
change
Use synonyms
of
the way of living and being, which is painful and demanding for many people.
Even though Change preposition
in
change
is not easy, it is Use synonyms
truely
rewarding. Correct your spelling
truly
Specices
revolution comes Correct your spelling
Species
frome
gene mutation which is a kind of Correct your spelling
from
change
. Without Use synonyms
it
human beings would not exist and we would not have the chance to enjoy the variety of beautiful plants and animals. In our personal lives, changes, sometimes taste bitter, Add a comma
it,
give
rise to rebirth, Correct word choice
and give
such
as divorce. Linking Words
It's
is safe to say that divorce is not pleasant, but as a psychotherapist, I Unnecessary verb
It
witness
many women and men get out of a marriage Wrong verb form
have witnessed
that is
not nurturing anymore and Linking Words
then
start a new chapter of their life where they can thrive.
In conclusion, even though Linking Words
change
means something new and scary, it is rewarding if you dare to take a leap of faith.Use synonyms
Submitted by zhuangyuan.psy on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Specific Examples
You've done an excellent job presenting well-structured points and supporting them with relevant examples. To further improve, consider diving deeper into specific examples, showcasing a more extensive range of scenarios where change proves beneficial.
Grammar/Spelling
Pay attention to minor grammatical errors and spelling mistakes; refining these details can enhance the clarity of your argument and overall presentation.
Variety in Language
Consider offering more varied sentence structures to enrich your writing and engage your readers more effectively.
Insightfulness
Your essay effectively communicates the positive aspects of change through both societal and personal lenses, providing a balanced and insightful view.
Introduction/Conclusion
The introduction and conclusion are strong, framing your argument well and bringing your essay to a satisfying closure.
Use of Examples
Using examples from both societal issues and personal development enriches your essay, adding depth and relatability.