Money spent on space exploration is a complete waste. Governments could better spend this money on other things to benefit the nation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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Task Achievement
Try to provide more specific examples to support your views on the importance of funding health care and education over space exploration. Real-world instances or data could enhance the persuasiveness of your argument.
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You successfully brought in some examples of technology advances due to space exploration, showing the benefits of such investments.
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