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The table illustrates secondary and high school teachers’ earnings in Australia, Denmark, Luxembourg, Japan and Korea in 2009.

The table illustrates secondary and high school teachers’ earnings in Australia, Denmark, Luxembourg, Japan and Korea in 2009.
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The tabular chart describes the income of
teacher
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teachers
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 who
teaches
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taught
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 in secondary and senior secondary
school
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schools
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 in five different
nation
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nations
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 in 2009. Overview, in both
school
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schools
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 the earning of
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the teacher
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teacher
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teachers
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 was
maximum
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 in Luxembourg as
compare
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compared
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 to other nations. As per the given information, in Luxembourg the starting salary of
teacher
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the teacher
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 was 80,000 which was
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almost
 double after 15
years
experience
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of experience
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,
whereas
 after 30
years
teacher
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the teacher
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 payout was 1,32,000 in
school
.
However
, in Denmark it was
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almost
 half
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from
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 Luxembourg for beginners, interestingly, after
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15 years
15years
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15 years
 it just increased by 9
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thousand
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thousands
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thousand
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 and
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the same
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same
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the same
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 for
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the next
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next
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 8
years
.
Likewise
, in Australia,
teacher
earning
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earnings
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was
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were
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 28,000 for
fresher
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freshers
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,
then
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2time
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2 times
 more after 15
years
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which
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who
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work
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further
 9years received 48,000. Moving towards the rest of the data, in
japan
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Japan
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teacher
 income was 34,000 in newly joining and approximately doubled after 15
years
 which was calculated
65,000
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at 65,000
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 , after 37
years
teacher
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teachers
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 get 86000.
Moreover
, in Korea
school
teacher
earns
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earn
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 30,000 and in
next
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the next
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 15
years
 they earn 48,000 and after 34
years
, their income was 62 thousand.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words teacher, school, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondary school
  • high school
  • earnings
  • salaries
  • cost of living
  • demand
  • governmental budgets
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • economic health
  • quality of education
  • retention rates
  • social recognition
  • professional status
  • financial stability
  • performance
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