The graph showed data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Lonodn 2000-2010

The graph showed data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Lonodn 2000-2010
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The graph gives information about the yearly
income
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of three bakeries in London over a
period
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of 10
years
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from 2000 to 2010.
Overall
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, It can be seen that Robbia’s bakery and Bernie’s buns showed an upward trend,
while
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the Lovely Loaves experienced a downward trend.
To begin
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with, the percentage of annual earnings for Robbia’s bakery was around 58,000
Pounds
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in 2000, and it remained stable for the next five
years
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.
Subsequently
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, It increased dramatically to around 64,000
Pounds
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in 2007, in 2008 it jumped to about 100,000
Pounds
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and
at the end
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of
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period
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the period
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, it was above 102,000
Pounds
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in 2010. As for Bernie’s Buns in 2000, the ratio of yearly
income
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was around 20,000
Pounds
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.
However
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, it increased for the next three
years
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to around 45,000
Pounds
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, and it still stable for the next four
years
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, 2007 it showed an upward trend of about 60,000
Pounds
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, and it increased drastically to 62”000
at the end
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of the
period
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in 2010 The
income
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of Lovely Loaves was the highest at the beginning of the
period
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about 82,000
Pounds
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in 2000, it fluctuated in the first four
years
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and
then
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plunged to half in 2010, which means it had the lowest
income
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of all three bakeries.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words income, period, years, pounds with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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