The table illustrates secondary and high school teachers’ earnings in Australia, Denmark, Luxembourg, Japan and Korea in 2009.

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The table provides data concerning the teachers'

wage

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wages

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five different countries in 2009 and it shows variations in the amount of

salary

earned related to the time spent

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this

profession.

Overall

Luxembourg

performed as the best payer to teachers considering the starter

salary

and its progression.

In contrast

Australia

payed

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paid

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the

least

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lowest

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salary

and achieved the smallest amount over

years

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. Considering the starting amount received by a secondary/high school teacher, it is possible to see that Asian countries, like Japan and Korea, pay around 32,000.

Luxembourg

on the other hand

, pays the highest money in

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essay, starting with 80,000, followed by Denmark.

However

Australia

is the country

where

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contributes three times

fewer

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Luxembourg

. About the progression over time,

Australia

Luxembourg

, Japan and Korea almost doubled after fifteen

years

whereas

Denmark

arose

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just

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10,000.

Following

this

trend, the maximum payment received by teachers in these countries is in

Luxembourg

and the minor is

Australia

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in Australia

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. Concerning the

years

necessary to achieve the max

salary

, Denmark takes 8

years

and Japan takes 37.

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The table illustrates secondary and high school teachers’ earnings in Australia, Denmark, Luxembourg, Japan and Korea in 2009.

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