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The table shows about underground railway system

The table shows about underground railway system
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The table represents the whole information about an underground
railway
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 system
builds
Wrong verb form
built
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 in various cities
of
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in
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 America with
total
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a total
the total
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 number of travellers during different
period
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periods
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 of time.
Overall
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,
the
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apply
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London was the first city
who
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that
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started
Wrong verb form
start
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underground
Correct article usage
an underground
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railway
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 facility at maximum speed
while
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 the brand new
railway
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 station in Los Angeles
designed
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was designed
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 for
least
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the least
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kilometer
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kilometre
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 of
route
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the route
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.
In addition
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 to
this
Linking Words
,
majority
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the majority
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 of the passengers
preffered
Correct your spelling
preferred
 to use the underground
railway
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 lines of Tokyo. In the
year
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 1863, the
railway
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 lines
build
Wrong verb form
built
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 underground in London created for
the
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a
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 route of 394
kilometer
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kilometre
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 which is completely opposite in regards to
kyoto
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Kyoto
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 in the
year
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 1981 with 11
kilometer
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kilometre
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 of
route
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the route
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. Meanwhile, the progress
took
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that took
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 place during the middle years 1900, 1927, and 1976 were 199km, 155km, and 126km for Paris, Tokyo, and Washington DC respectively.
However
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, with the average speed Tokyo
hold
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holds
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the
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apply
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1,927
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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travellers per
year
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.
Likewise
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, the
people
Correct quantifier usage
number of people
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used
Wrong verb form
using
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 Paris's underground
railway
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 facility per
year
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 was 1,191 million which was more than 30% of the passengers in London.
Additionally
Linking Words
,
the
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apply
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Los Angeles and
the
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apply
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Kyoto provided service to approximately 50 million people per
year
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words railway, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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