The bar chart below shows the popularity of well-known Instagram accounts in 2018 and 2021. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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the popularity of 5 popular Instagram accounts (Cristiano Ronaldo, The Rock, Arian Grande, Kylie Jenner and Selena Gomez) in 2018 and 2021.

Unites

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are measured in

millions

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, all

the

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apply

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five accounts

had shown

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a significant

increased

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in the given period,

while

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Cristiano Ronaldo

has

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the most

fans

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in the

last

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year

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. The remaining four accounts

reach

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about the same

number

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fans

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the

last

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year

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. Cristiano Ronaldo had about 110

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millions

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million

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fans

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in the first

year

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and the numbers

had dramatic

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increase

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to about 320

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millions

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million

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, which has the highest

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of supporters. The rock started

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with

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about 100

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millions

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million

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supporters, who had the least

supported

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support

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in the first

year

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, had

also

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increase

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double the

number

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approximately

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to approximately

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260

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millions

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million

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Similarly

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, Arian Grande, Kylie Jenner and Selena Gomez started with about 120

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millions

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million

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fans

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and

also

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increase

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double the

number

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to about 250

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millions

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million

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fans

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, last".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words millions, fans, year, number with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.

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5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
21
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

150 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

bar chart
popularity
Instagram accounts
growth
decline
comparison
remained stable
significant change
new entries
exits
patterns
trends
noteworthy
notable
fluctuation
predominant
dominant
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The bar chart below shows the popularity of well-known Instagram accounts in 2018 and 2021. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Some people think foreign visitors should be charged more than local people when they visit the cultural and historical attractions in a country To what extent do you agree or disagree?