The bar chart below shows the popularity of well-known Instagram accounts in 2018 and 2021. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart

illustrate

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illustrates

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the popularity of 5 popular Instagram accounts (Cristiano Ronaldo, The Rock, Arian Grande, Kylie Jenner and Selena Gomez) in 2018 and 2021.

Unites

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Units

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are measured in

millions

Overall

, all

the

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apply

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five accounts

had shown

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showed

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a significant

increased

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in the given period,

while

Cristiano Ronaldo

has

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had

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the most

fans

in the

last

year

. The remaining four accounts

reach

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reached

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about the same

number

fans

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the

last

year

. Cristiano Ronaldo had about 110

millions

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million

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fans

in the first

year

and the numbers

had dramatic

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dramatically

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increase

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increased

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to about 320

millions

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million

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, which has the highest

number

of supporters. The rock started

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with

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about 100

millions

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million

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supporters, who had the least

supported

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support

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in the first

year

, had

also

increase

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increased

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double the

number

approximately

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to approximately

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260

millions

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million

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Similarly

, Arian Grande, Kylie Jenner and Selena Gomez started with about 120

millions

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million

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fans

and

also

increase

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increased

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double the

number

to about 250

millions

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million

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fans

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Vocabulary: Replace the words millions, fans, year, number with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
21Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

150 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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