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Automated systems can replace labour, do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, automated
systems
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 have become incredibly sophisticated, integrating machines into various employment fields.
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 some worry that
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 activity can potentially replace human labour,
others
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 believe that automation
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 complements human abilities. I wholeheartedly agree with the latter opinion, and
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 essay will explain why. First and foremost, self-operating
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 beneficially affect certain job industries,
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 as engineering and customer service. Automated processes can be established for various tasks,
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 as coding, gathering customer data and even chatting.
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, most online shopping platforms implemented chatbots for communicating and assisting buyers with easy issues.
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, with
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 automated aid, the operation of different companies becomes more productive and efficient, without completely replacing labour.
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, certain occupations are unable to exist without human interaction,
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 as teachers, actors, therapists and doctors. These jobs cannot be substituted with machines, as they participate in activities like building a connection with
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, maintaining eye-to-eye contact, expressing empathy and kindness, and mimicking movements and gestures, which are impossible to achieve by robots and self-managing programs.
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, if robots try to engage in teaching, students will not gain knowledge about how to build relationships with
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 providing kindness and sympathy. In conclusion, even though some argue that machines will take over employees, I truly believe that it is unlikely to happen. Most industries require human participation and collaborative work which is hard to do with self-regulated
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. These
systems
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 aid in attaining goals but
not
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 fully replace workers as they are needed for monitoring processes and interacting with
others
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.
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