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The graph below shows CO2 emissions for different forms of transport in the European Union. The Pie Chart shows the percentage of European Union funds being spent on different forms of transport. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows CO2 emissions for different forms of transport in the European Union. The Pie Chart shows the percentage of European Union funds being spent on different forms of transport. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below. You should write at least 150 words.
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The pie chart denotes CO2
emissions
form
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from
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 distinct forms of
vehicles
 in the European Union.
Overall
, the highest spent
of
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on
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transportations
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transportation
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 is roads.
In addition
, there are several
vehicles
 that possess the same percentages in a small percentage.
Firstly
, there are only three
transportations
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transportation
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 that
spend
Verb problem
cause
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 huge
emissions
 of CO2. Roads
is
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are
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 more
numeruous
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numerous
 than other
vehicles
, and it spends 52%. The second position is railways
that
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which
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consumes
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consume
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the
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apply
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gas
emissions
that is
 31 per cent, and the next is public transport only 10 of percentage that expends
the
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apply
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emissions
 of
gas
.
Secondly
, there are several
vehicles
 that expend
gas
emissions
that
is
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are
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smallest
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the smallest
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. Ports and unknown have a similarity of spending
gas
 with
the
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a
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 value around 2%, and the leftovers are intermodal, inland
waterway
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waterways
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 and airports
also
 possessing the same value
that is
 just 1 per cent.
Additionally
, a possibility of
this
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these
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 conditions is induced by how many the transportations
that is
 distinguished from several types in that country.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, vehicles, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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