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73.Some people think that the environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve. Others, however, believe that these problems cannot be solved if individuals do not take actions. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #individuals #actions
Nowadays issues concerning the
environment
 are very common.Some individuals
belive
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believe
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 that
problems
 related to the
environment
 are too large to be solved by people
while
 others think that
theres
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there
 no possibility of solving these
problems
 if
theres
 no action
taken
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is taken
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.
This
 essay will argue both views and give my opinion.
To begin
with
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with,
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 Some individuals
belive
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believe
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 that
problems
 related to the
environment
 are too large to be solved by people.
This
 is because the government has to intervene in order to control most environmental
problems
for example
 by
provide
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providing
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 bins and designated land for waste .If
such
 is not provided
this
 leads to diseases
such
 as malaria.
e.g
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e.g.
 there
is
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are
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 always outbreaks of malaria in Africa because the governments rarely provide sufficient waste management resources.
Thus
 leading to famine.
On the other hand
,it is our great responsibility to protect the
enviroment
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environment
 as humans.
Moreover
For
example
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example,
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 we should not throw away litter at all places ,we should use bins provided for waste.
This
 will lead to a dirty and
harzadous
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hazardous
environment
 which leads to
environment
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environmental
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 pollution.
Therefore
it
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apply
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we should take appropriate measures to eliminate
this
 issue.
Therefore
 I strongly agree that it is our responsibility as humans to save our
environment
. In conclusion,
This
 essay
argued
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argues
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 that individuals
belive
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believe
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 that
problems
 related to the
environment
 are too large to be solved by people
while
 others think that
theres
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there's
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 no possibility of solving these
problems
 if
theres
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there's
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 no action
taken
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is taken
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. I strongly agree that it is our responsibility as humans to save our
environment
.

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structure
Ensure that your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, at least two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each paragraph should focus on a separate main idea and be clearly distinct from the others.
coherence
Use linking words and phrases to connect ideas within and across paragraphs to improve the flow of your argument. This enhances the essay's coherence.
development
Develop your main points with explanations, examples, and details. Supporting your views with specific evidence demonstrates your understanding of the topic.
conclusion
Restate the main points and your opinion in the conclusion to reinforce the argument and provide a clear ending to the essay.
task response
Address all parts of the task by discussing both views and providing your own opinion. Make sure to give a balanced discussion if the question asks for the discussion of more than one viewpoint.
examples
Work on providing specific examples to support your arguments. The use of hypothetical situations or general statements is less effective than real-world examples and authoritative references.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • global warming
  • pollution
  • deforestation
  • overwhelming
  • Paris Agreement
  • sustainable practices
  • waste reduction
  • conserving energy
  • market demands
  • awareness campaigns
  • systemic change
  • ripple effect
  • environmental degradation
  • lifestyle choices
  • regulations
  • accountability
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