The chart below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much

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The charts beneath illustrate the ordinary

ratio

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of sodium, saturated fat and

sugar

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in daily routine food. which may cause

health

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problems if eaten too much.

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, it is clear that these nutrients are mostly used in breakfast.

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, in lunch and snacks the

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above normal. But,

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dinner, the

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of these nutrients is low which is good for

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, the percentage of sodium is 43%, saturated fat is 37% and

sugar

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is 23% added in breakfast.

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percentage is very high and not good for

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, the

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is 14%, 21% and 42% in snacks. The

sugar

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is too much added in snacks.

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also

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not suitable for

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, in lunch, the sodium is 29%, saturated fat is 26% and

sugar

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is 19% which is above average.

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, the percentage is 14%, 16% and

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16% in dinner.

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is the average

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used.

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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 5 times.

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