The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
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The line chart illustrates how the number of closing and opening
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in a country from 2011 to 2018.
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, it can be vividly seen that even though both figures experienced fluctuations, the closings exceeded the opening ones in all years, except in 2015. Looking at the data in a more detailed analysis, there were around 6,5000
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closing in the beginning, which fluctuated to meet its first sum in the next four years. After that,
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figure plunged to reach the lowest number below 1,000 before bouncing back in 2016 and levelling off onwards. Turning to another category,
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that opened had the biggest numbers in 2011 at more than 8,000. After going down extremely in 2012, it went up to reach a similar position of closing
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in 2014 at around 6,400. After which it fell to 4,000 before experiencing no change for the following three years. In the
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year, it decreases by 1,0000
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words shops with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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