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Differing amount of nitrogen oxide by four types of vehicles.

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Introduction
The given line graph illustrates the information about the nitrogen oxide emissions produced by four vehicles
such
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 as
buses
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 ,
lorries
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, petrol
cars
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,
diesel
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and diesel
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cars
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 in the period of 120kph, from 10 to 130kph
Body paragraph 1
Overall
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, it is obvious that
buses
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,
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lorries
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and lorries
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 saw
upward
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an upward
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 trend
while
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 petrol
cars
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,
diesel
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and diesel
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cars
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a fluctuations
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fluctuated
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 through the surveyed period.
Body paragraph 2
First,
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from 10kph to 60kph the
buses
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,
the
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and the
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lorries
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 went down to 15
g
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/
km
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.
Morever
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Moreover
, between 70kph to
130kph
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130kph,
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 rose up to.
In
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At
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 130kph,the
buses
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 reached
the
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a
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 peak of about 45
g
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/
km
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 and
in
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at
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 10kph,
lorries
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 reached
the
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a
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 peak of about 30
g
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/
km
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.
However
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,
in
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at
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 60kph the
buses
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 hit the lowest point of 25
g
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/
km
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 and the
lorries
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 hit the lowest point of 15
g
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/
km
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. The amount of
witnessed
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witnesses
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an
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apply
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increased about from
Conclusion
Secondly
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, between 10kph to 40kph
the
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apply
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petrol
cars
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,
the
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apply
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diesel
car
Fix the agreement mistake
cars
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 went down to 5
g
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/
km
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.
Morever
Correct your spelling
Moreover
, from 40kph to 130kph
a fluctuations
Correct the article-noun agreement
fluctuations
a fluctuation
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.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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