The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

The  diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.
The display maps
describes
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the update that took place in
public
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library
. The data about before and after is explained below.
Firstly
, The maps for the central
library
20 years ago have three rooms that
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Children
's
books
,
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room
and
Computer
games respectively. In the
Library
hall
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there are
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tables and chairs in the centre of the
library
in front of the entrance, on the right side there are
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for adult non-fiction
books
and on the left side there are
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for adult fiction
books
. The enquiry desk
located
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on the right at the entrance door. In the Central
library
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now, there are several things that changed from the old central
library
layout. The
Computer
games
replaced
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by
Children
's
book
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books
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and the old
Children
's book
room
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a lecture
room
,
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the
computer
room
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to
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the reading
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reading
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room
and they
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one new
room
replacing the enquiry desk
to
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cafe
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the cafe
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. In
recent
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central
library
hall, they remove the tables and chairs and in between
children's
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the children's
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fiction book and
computer
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the computer
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room
there
is
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all
reference
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the reference
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books
and for the information desk they are in one place as the new
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machines and adult fiction
books
in between
lecture
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the lecture
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room
and cafe. There is a great development in both
library
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and
to conclude
there are too many facilities compared to others. the above information gives a brief idea about the Central
Library
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, children, books, room, computer with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • layout
  • shelving
  • reading area
  • reference section
  • encyclopedias
  • dictionaries
  • circulation desk
  • transactions
  • digital media
  • computer stations
  • multimedia rooms
  • café area
  • social environment
  • leisure-friendly
  • expanded reading areas
  • user experience
  • comfortable seating
  • children's section
  • engage younger readers
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