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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.
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The display maps
describes
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 the update that took place in
public
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a public
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library
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. The data about before and after is explained below.
Firstly
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, The maps for the central
library
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 20 years ago have three rooms that
containing
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Children
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's
books
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,
Reading
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a Reading
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room
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 and
Computer
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 games respectively. In the
Library
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hall
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 there are
containing
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tables and chairs in the centre of the
library
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 in front of the entrance, on the right side there are
shelf
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shelves
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 for adult non-fiction
books
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 and on the left side there are
shelf
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shelves
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 for adult fiction
books
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. The enquiry desk
located
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 on the right at the entrance door. In the Central
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library
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 now, there are several things that changed from the old central
library
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 layout. The
Computer
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 games
replaced
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were replaced
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 by
Children
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's
book
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books
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 and the old
Children
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's book
room
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become
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 a lecture
room
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,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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 the
computer
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room
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move
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to
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into
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the reading
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reading
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read
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room
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 and they
develop
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 one new
room
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 replacing the enquiry desk
to
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cafe
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the cafe
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. In
recent
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the recent
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 central
library
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 hall, they remove the tables and chairs and in between
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children's
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the children's
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 fiction book and
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computer
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the computer
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room
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 there
is
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are
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 all
reference
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the reference
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books
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 and for the information desk they are in one place as the new
seld-service
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self-service
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 machines and adult fiction
books
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 in between
lecture
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the lecture
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room
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 and cafe. There is a great development in both
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library
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libraries
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 and
to conclude
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 there are too many facilities compared to others. the above information gives a brief idea about the Central
Library
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, children, books, room, computer with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • layout
  • shelving
  • reading area
  • reference section
  • encyclopedias
  • dictionaries
  • circulation desk
  • transactions
  • digital media
  • computer stations
  • multimedia rooms
  • café area
  • social environment
  • leisure-friendly
  • expanded reading areas
  • user experience
  • comfortable seating
  • children's section
  • engage younger readers
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