some people say that in all levels of education from primary schools to universities, too much time is spend on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills.

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it to use in its education system. These methods
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on cultors and countries aim to build
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structures. Some people
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that
this
way which
focus
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on learning facts and not
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enough on learning practical
skills
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method. I
completly
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agree with
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, every society
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in university and school.
mechanic
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, As you know there are not enough
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facilities
in university that help to improve
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skill in practical form.But
this
skill
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to
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in real
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to learn it better.
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in some
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you should do
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work by hand not just read it and learn it by book. Another reason why I agree with
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talent. Everyone
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certain
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that should progress
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.
Education
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system should find it and develop it. One of
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is
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practical
class more
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classes
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to find
students
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talent.
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more
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class lead to
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their talents and
due to
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themself
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.
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situation and
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goverment
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government
should spend money and build more
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structures
structure
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so expensive.
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goverment
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government
governments
prefer to focus on just
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learning facts. In conclusion,
although
learning facts is
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particulary
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particularly
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section of education,I
belive
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believe
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there are better ways to learn more
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like practical
skills
that should
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be consentrate
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consentrate
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concentrated
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it
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rote memorization
  • practical skills
  • adaptable skills
  • critical thinking
  • balanced approach
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making
  • workforce readiness
  • real-life challenges
  • technological advancements
  • information management
  • creativity hindrance
  • lifelong learning
  • skill development
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